>>Some appear for one person who is in real need, taking them to a safe place that they may never be able to leave; others appear for a certain period of time and may disappear without being used; while the third kind, that are very rare, stay open permanently but move around continously, so getting though it is total luck and getting back is almost impossible.<<
Fascinating! I like the different kinds of natural doors.
>>Each Blue family member worked with a different group of people for each world, once they knew the world wouldn’t fail, which always included a Yellow, as they were needed to create the races. <<
That doesn't parse well. I recommend:
"Once they knew the world wouldn’t fail, each Blue family member worked with a different group of people for each world. Every group always included a Yellow, as they were needed to create the races."
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Date: 2012-09-11 09:55 pm (UTC)Fascinating! I like the different kinds of natural doors.
>>Each Blue family member worked with a different group of people for each world, once they knew the world wouldn’t fail, which always included a Yellow, as they were needed to create the races. <<
That doesn't parse well. I recommend:
"Once they knew the world wouldn’t fail, each Blue family member worked with a different group of people for each world. Every group always included a Yellow, as they were needed to create the races."