I'm happy to catch hints of Anubis. He is a favorite deity to read about, and quite formidable.
>>It had been years since they had last seen each other, they'd both still been children, so it was silly to still feel the way he did the day he left her. <<
Run-on sentence: either break it after "each other," or insert "and" before "they'd."
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Date: 2011-12-30 11:29 pm (UTC)>>It had been years since they had last seen each other, they'd both still been children, so it was silly to still feel the way he did the day he left her. <<
Run-on sentence: either break it after "each other," or insert "and" before "they'd."