I like this story. The world walkers are intriguing. I look forward to reading more about them.
>> she had the thirt-fourth tattoo <<
That should say "thirty-fourth" above.
>>Smiling again at the thought of finally travelling to one of the worlds she studied she started walking towards the front door.<<
Add a comma after "studied" above.
>>Lucille coudn't help looking<<
That should say "couldn't" above.
>>It seemed strange that she still looked the same way she had on the day she started her studies, although she was probably a little taller, and decided that it was time to change something.<<
Good idea, actually -- that's a common custom for marking important milestones in life. Often a person will change their hairstyle, but sometimes it's something else. Tattoos are popular in some cultures, but she already has those and seems to be looking for something else.
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Date: 2011-12-30 10:34 pm (UTC)>> she had the thirt-fourth tattoo <<
That should say "thirty-fourth" above.
>>Smiling again at the thought of finally travelling to one of the worlds she studied she started walking towards the front door.<<
Add a comma after "studied" above.
>>Lucille coudn't help looking<<
That should say "couldn't" above.
>>It seemed strange that she still looked the same way she had on the day she started her studies, although she was probably a little taller, and decided that it was time to change something.<<
Good idea, actually -- that's a common custom for marking important milestones in life. Often a person will change their hairstyle, but sometimes it's something else. Tattoos are popular in some cultures, but she already has those and seems to be looking for something else.