Date: 2011-10-10 10:53 pm (UTC)
P.S. You switch from the third person (Tristan/he) to the first person (I) in mid paragraph (the one that begins "He looked back down at the book").

Look, if you don't find my copyedits helpful, just say and I will stop reading/commenting.
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