ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2014-01-07 04:10 am (UTC)

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Wow, there's a lot of power in this one.

>>Even though it was better than the other rooms there was still nothing that made it seem more than a reception in a hotel. Before she’d moved into the house it had made sense to focus on what had seemed to be the most important things, like the rules. Finding herself in a building that seemed more like a hotel told her it had been a mistake.<<

It always takes time to make a house a home, or any building. You have to form memories, choose decorations that mean something, make scratches on the furniture. It has to be lived in.

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