ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2013-06-18 03:13 am (UTC)

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>>they’re the one I’m more likely to recognise<<

That should say "ones" above.

>>He choses to pull families apart<<

That should say "chose" or "chooses" above.

>>since my brother did chose to go to Mothar<<

That should say "choose" above.

I love the complexity in this installment! There are so many issues about different groups and religions and identities, and about groups vs. individuals.

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