ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2013-02-23 02:12 am (UTC)

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“We can’t be gentle with you if you’re going to be a good donor.”

Point of tone rather than grammar: I suggest "can't be too gentle" or "can't coddle you too much" because they are, in fact, being at least somewhat gentle with people. They have to. Otherwise nobody would stay.

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