>> did her best not to seem unworried about what might come next. <<

That should probably say "not to seem worried" or "best to seem unworried" above.

>>but there were set up to discourage people.<<

I think that should say "they" above.

>>“My choice was made based on what Quiar needed and not on what Quiarans needed<<

I think this would sound better with "what Quiarans wanted" for contrast.

>>between the Larnachians and the Thesians.<<

That should say "Larnachis and the Theasians" above.


It's fun to see more of Quiar! *chuckle* And here we are in Seahorse Port, coming up on Mardi Gras season ... I'm tempted to ask for a parade as a side piece.