>>Quiar is well know for their<<

That should say "known" above.

>> I plan on visiting Quiar regularly, hopefully convince some other Moonjumpers to come here, and once that happens hopefully we’ll begin to work together properly.” <<

This is lengthy and has repetition. I suggest:

“I plan on visiting Quiar regularly, and perhaps I can convince some other Moonjumpers to come here. Once that happens, hopefully we’ll begin to work together properly.”

>>seems like off worlders have two reactions<<

That should say "off-worlders" throughout.

>>When he saw the disarray in the room, all of his filing cabinets had been searched though and the files thrown everywhere, he bit his lip, trying not to let his feelings show too badly.<<

This would benefit from rearrangement for clarity:

"When he saw the disarray in the room, he bit his lip, trying not to let his feelings show too badly. All of his filing cabinets had been searched through and the files thrown everywhere."

>>“I’ll make certain that you superior<<

That should say "your" above.

>>To be continued. (This part ended up being much longer than I planned on it being.)<<

But it's so exciting! I am enjoying the longer chapters.

Aulus is really sweet.