ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2012-08-08 09:35 pm (UTC)

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>>easier to a avoid if she knew. <<

Delete "a" above.

>>The voice was one she recognised and knowing that he was leading the invasion force… breathing shallowly in order to keep the sounds she made to a minimum <<

Capitalize "Breathing" above.

>>if they had of been told about the door<<

Delete "of" above.

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