ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2012-07-28 07:07 am (UTC)

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>>“How much have you had to drink?”<<

You might want to specify alcohol there. My first thought was that she might be unwell from not having enough blood.

Ouchy story all around, but very good. I'd enjoy seeing more of this.

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