>>“I did hear once about there being a mixed heritage village somewhere near my village, but I don't know if it ever actually existed.”<<
The early lines of dialog need speaker references so that we know who is saying what. Always make sure the first exchange in each installment is tagged with character names.
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The early lines of dialog need speaker references so that we know who is saying what. Always make sure the first exchange in each installment is tagged with character names.
>> on the buttom rung <<
That should say "bottom" above.