ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2011-12-31 07:48 am (UTC)

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>>“I think he would have been,” Delyth replied, “but I don't why.<<

That should say "I don't know why."

>>“When I was younger there was a few<<

That should say "there were" above.

>>a lot of people will arrive in a sort space of time<<

That should say "short" above.

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