ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2011-12-31 04:26 am (UTC)

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>>“That he feels free to move on because he sees you as the betrayed<<

I think that should say "betrayer" above.

>>people had known about the town and had moved there is they needed to.<<

That should say "as" above.

>>Only the true priests and priestess even knew it existed.<<

That should say "priestesses" above.

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