ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2011-12-31 04:20 am (UTC)

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>>remembered how she had know about North Square. <<

That should say "known" above.

>>as though all the races failed to fulfil their expectations when they arrive here. <<

Those should say "fulfill" and "arrived" above.

>>but I still feel, even after fifteen years, life I would be betraying your father.<<

That should say "like" above.

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