ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2011-10-25 02:37 am (UTC)

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>>Trying not to focus too hard on what he was doing Heliopath stood<<

That needs a comma after "doing" above.

>>he should have got someone else<<

That should say "gotten" above.

>>The mage had a red cuffs<<

Delete "a" above.

>>“You should have got someone else<<

That should say "gotten" above.

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