ext_3219 ([identity profile] ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] k_a_webb 2011-10-19 03:28 am (UTC)

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This story is so bittersweet. It's a good part of Richard's story to capture.

>>the sword of Death out of it's sheath<<

That should say "its" above.

>>With a thought he summoned the book of Death, which appeared on his lap, and a quill.<<

Okay, how did he learn to write with a quill? If it's anything like a normal quill, that's a different skill than writing with a ballpoint pen. I think it would be amusing to see him trying to figure that out the first time.

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