The only place I can pick up a switch from third to first is where Tristan is reading his grandfather's book, which is written in first person. If that's not where you mean then can you show me wherer it is.

If I didn't find people copyediting for me then I wouldn't offer credits for it. Have I done something to make you feel like I don't appreciate it? I haven't made the changes yet because I have to focus on writing at the moment and I'll go back edit posted work when I have some time.